Hi! I just finished reading your version of the Moon Man story. I remember reading the original version a little, but reading your authors note definitely helped refresh my memory. I really loved how you chose to change up this story! It still had the same morals tied to the original it felt like, but it was also a completely new story. I especially liked how you were able to change the ending. I like that the rich man was content at the end and was able to feel loved and like he belonged in the world. Great job!
Hello, Julia! First off, I have to say that your dog is absolutely adorable and I appreciate the picture of him you posted! I have just finished reading your take on the classic story "The Moon Man", and I was really impressed! I had not read the original version of this story, so I did read the authors note before I read your version to kind of help me make comparisons between the two. I do like how you changed the story to make it your own, but it was still similar enough to the original so that the readers can see where your ideas came from. I also really liked how you changed the ending to make it your own, and I can honestly say that I preferred your ending to the story better than the original ending! I love the title of the story, and I do think that will make the readers interested in reading it. Your story definitely made me feel happy for the rich man that he was finally able to find happiness and fulfillment in being turned into the moon. I am glad that he was not regretful of his decision to take the risk of being turned into something he did not know what would be. I would say, for your future stories, to definitely continue this same writing style you have started with! It will be nice to see some stories with more details, but I did really enjoy this first story! I hope you have fun with this project and I look forward to reading more from you! Have a great semester!
Hi Julia! I loved your retelling of the Moon Man story. I remember reading the original story I few weeks back, and I always felt a little unsatisfied with the ending. However, I loved the twist you added, because it made a lot more sense than the original ending. I love how you brought in humans interaction with the moon on a regular basis, and allowed the man to find satisfaction in that. I love how you kept the style more consistent with the original, as well. You had a refreshing take on the story without harming the integrity of the original. I am definitely excited to read more from you!
Hi Julia! i just finished reading your story about the moon, i loved it! the story was the perfect combination of a good short story but also something that kept you intrigued the whole time. your imagery and details within the story kept me visualizing the entire time. Also your use of dialogue was great! I love how you made the ending and it made me happy to know that the man who was so unsatisfied was finally able to be happy. It was great how you related the moon to so many things that people use it for. In the future maybe a little more expansion on your story would help. Although it is a great short story, this story would also be great with some more details and length to it.
Hey Julia, I just finished reading about the moon man story. It was excellent! The story was short and sweet and you managed to keep me interested in what was going to happen next the entire time. I realized when reading it that I had a picture of what was happening in my head the whole time. I think this is cool because you obviously are talented at writing sensory and visual language.
Hi Julia! I read your Moon Man, Shine Bright story. I had not read that story so your Author’s Notes were really well written. I enjoyed the point you were trying to make with your overall story—be happy with who you are because there is no one else like you in this world and you are who you are for a reason. I thought you put an interesting twist on it. Although the rich man did not feel fulfilled, he felt fulfilled as the moon and filled was happy to know that he was helping others, which is also a big life lesson. We can always benefit from helping others. My favorite quote is “a candle loses nothing by lighting another candle” so this story made me happy to read. Thanks so much for your story and I look forward to reading more from you! You did a great job!
Hi Julia! I remember reading your Moon Man story at the beginning of the semester, and I just read your Wolf story that you've added to your portfolio. Now I have an easier way to find all your stories, hahaha! I liked that you made a writing style in your wolf story similar to the mindset of a personified animal. You don't expect an animal to have perfect English or complete understanding of the consequences of a situation. Your adaptation to look through the perspective of the animal made for a cute, feel good story. That seems to be an overarching theme you have going for your stories in this course whenever I come across them! I like your visual style as well with your website. It's clean and easy to look at, while also still being cute as well! I can't wait to come back and read more from you!
Hi Julia! I loved the Moon Man story. I could see where you had based it on the Laotian story, but you did a great job of making it your own. Your character was incredibly relatable, even though I'm not rich or a man--everyone can relate to his situation. Can money buy happiness, fulfillment, or love? I really liked that he was more introspective than the man in the original myth, and he was a lot more sympathetic. In the original, I remember feeling a vindictive satisfaction that that ungrateful man had been turned into the moon and couldn't turn back. In your story, I was happy for him because he got everything he wanted and he seemed more...worthy?...of being the moon...? I don't know if that's the right word. Anyway, you did a great job of inspiring sympathy for you new character in a short span and keeping with your inspiration. Great work!
Hey Julia! I just finished reading your story "Moon Man, Shine Bright," and loved it! I appreciated that it was short and easy to read. I thought the dialogue between the two characters was nicely written and it was easy for the reader to understand what was going on between them. This was such a creative version of the original story "The Man in the Moon." As I was reading your story, I was beginning to feel a little sorry for the man, all he wanted was to feel like he was wanted and had a purpose. I think this story had a valuable life lesson as well, being that even though you may have all the wealth and jewels in the world, you still may not be fulfilled. On a side note, I think the overall layout and theme of your Portfolio is nice! I like how it's simple to navigate and organized.
Hello Julia, I really enjoyed reading your version of the original story called “Man on the Moon.” I thought your explanations for each change of the blacksmith was excellent! In my opinion I thought your story was better than the original due to all the detail that you added within your version of the story. Having all the detail really allowed me to connect to the story better because I could envision what was happening even better and relate to the character. Also I liked how you turned the story into a happy ending with the blacksmith finally being happy! I wonder what happened to the shaman, maybe in the future a story could be made about the shaman’s life and how he ended up becoming a shaman. I think you portfolio is also looking great! You have great pictures and an easy to navigate loadout. Overall the story was great, keep up the good work!
I really like your idea of retelling stories from myth and folklore. It is always interesting to see the way that people interpret stories differently and how it might change the story once it is retold. The words you chose to include in the story really add a lot of detail and emphasis on certain parts. It is nice to read stories like this because it is easier to visualize exactly what the writer intends. Towards the end, I really like how you choose to have a paragraph where every sentence starts with the same phrase. When stories have paragraphs like this, it emphasizes what is being said. Was there any reason in particular why you chose to retell this story? Was it your favorite? Or did you feel that you could write the best story from it? Answering these kind of questions would be nice for the reader to know in the author’s notes! I really enjoyed reading your stories. I look forward to coming back and reading some more!
Hey Julia! I remember reading and enjoying your Moon Man story earlier in the semester, I love that you included it in your project as well! I also enjoyed your story of the wolf, I felt like I could feel the wolf's sadness when he realized he had upset the human. How would the story have changed if the wolf had already eaten the pig when the human had arrived? I'd be curious to see how the human would have responded and how sad the wolf would have been. I can only imagine how distraught the woman would have been. With the moon man, why did the man desire to be these many things? Should the shaman have shown a degree of compassion and restraint when it became obvious that this man was intoxicated? It would have been an even more entertaining story if the man had returned the next day, still determined to be transformed instead of in his present state. I can't wait to see what stories you choose next!
Hey Julia, Great portfolio so far! I like how you have your webpage set up. The moon picture on the first story is particularly powerful as it takes up the entire page, really setting the mood for that story. I really like the “Moon Man” story itself as well. Your descriptive imagery is fantastic. It seems like you have kept the description down to keep the story lean, but I would love to see a fully embellished story. I actually laughed out loud at the idea of a chalice afraid of germs. I really like that this story ultimately had a happy ending and I think that makes a difference in the way this retelling will be perceived. Typically stories like this only return their protagonist back to start or leave them stranded but having learned a lesson. I like the idea that the moon was once a man but is now far happier being the moon. Overall excellent portfolio, keep up the good work!
Your portfolio is setup nicely! It is also easy navigate and to get to your comment wall. I like your idea of re-telling the mythological stories. These stories have great moral values. I want to applaud you on making the description in the Man in the Moon as vivid as you did. When authors go into detail when describing the story it helps visualize the story. The Bad Wolf, Good Wolf story was even better than the first story that you wrote. I really like the picture of the wolf that you used too. I could really feel the emotions of the wolf and the human in this story. The fact that you changed the perspective of the story being told from the wolf gives the story a different meaning. Why did you want to do that? I enjoyed reading both versions. Your authors note is well written as well! Keep up the good work. I am looking forward to reading more stories.
Julia! I have returned to your comment board! I wanted to see your progress so far on your story posts or see how the revisions have gone for you c: Though I cry not seeing extra stories to read, I had a good time going back and reading the others again! I feel as though your Wolf story has a better flow this time around! You also seemed to add a bit more elements I didn't notice before with commas, bold, and easier to grasp dialogue. It still warms my heart to read and I really appreciate that! Do you think that your future stories will also have the same plot of teaching a moral lesson or doing right to a wrong you've committed? Your stories have deeper meaning than just what's on the surface which I love. I can't wait to come back and see other additions! Bye bye for now~
Hey Julia! I just read your "Man in the Moon" story and I absolutely love how you included what role that the moon plays in the world! This is just a suggestion, but I think it would be beneficial to your readers if maybe you included how the moon also plays a role creating the tides in the ocean. I also think it would be interesting to see the man/goblet's reaction to being turned into the moon! As even I did not know how farmers and fishermen depended on the moon for their livelihoods, maybe you could depict the man as throwing a tantrum because he was turned into a moon. Maybe he could ask, "The moon? I wanted to have a purpose and you turned me into the moon? Why couldn't you have turned me into the sun at least?", and then there could be someone or something that educates him on the importance of the moon!
Hey Julia" I just read "the Moon Man" and i really love how you changed from the original version. In the Man in the Moon, the ending was a miserable for the blacksmith, to become the moon forever. Your new version turned out that the Moon was actually a reward for the wealthy man. The richest image of the man reminded me about the life many people i know. They were rich but they doesn't have much friend, i mean truly friend, not just a relationship. As you pointed out in your notes, it was very hard to grasp the happiness and money was not alway a factor to achieve happiness. Be grateful for what you already have was always a great lesson. I just had one little thing to curious, that was why the shaman risked his power to fulfill that rich people? Was a shaman receive something as a reward to doing this?
Your way of telling stories is such a refreshing take on the subject matter of the class. I especially love the way you choose the images for your stories. The main image on your site is a drawing, a take on the world from someone else's view or background, but the individual story pictures are presented with some sort of crisp feel to them. They are high resolution pictures of the natural world and then your stories follow them with both grace and patience in presentation. I thoroughly enjoy this style of blogging and presenting information. The stories were also quite unique to the original interpretations and the spacing in the presentation helped me follow the narrative better and your decision to italicize and bold certain words was also very helpful to me as a reader. Thank you for sharing your great work, Julia! I look forward to reading more of your portfolio as the year continues.
Hi Julia! I just got finished reading your story Good Wolf. I loved the picture you chose for your cover picture. That allowed us to get a clear picture in our heads of what the wolf in the story looked like. I thought how you worded and went about telling this story was really different and interesting. Since it was being told from an animals perspective, I like how you made the wolf's thoughts much simpler. In the story, it made me wonder why the human was so surprised that the wolf took the pig and was so upset at him. He should realize that it is the wolf's nature to hunt and get smaller animals for their food, so that part was confusing to me. I did like how it ended and how grateful the woman was to have her pig back!
I really enjoyed your first story! Usually, when there's a story about someone wanting a grandiose life for themselves, they get horridly turned away after learning a terrible lesson and eventually learn to settle for their average life. So it was very satisfying to have a story like yours where the man gets exactly what he wants and is perfectly satisfied. After all, why do we seem to shun our desires and the want for a better life? I think there's nothing wrong with that and stories that make us feel guilty or confused for wanting something more have left a plain taste in my mouth. So thank you so much for that first story! I also really enjoyed your other two stories. It was very heart-warming to explore the bond between a domesticated wolf and his owner. You did a great job with your use of pictures in "The Foolish Feline." The one at the end was kind of funny with the tiger sitting there in defeat. Awesome job overall!
I was reading the titles of your different stories and saw that most of them were alliterated (Moon Man and Foolish Feline) or at least softly alliterated (Cocky King) and love the theme. Then I saw the Good Wolf story title and thought "Nooooooo!" haha! So of course I chose the Good Wolf story to make sure the story made up for the break of the chain! I actually enjoyed it a lot! I think the way that you rewrote the story was very unique, but also portrayed your own style very well! I honest to goodness tried really hard to find something that I would change in order to provide some constructive criticism for you on the story, but I just couldn't think of anything! I think Abbie Farwell would approve! Anyway, great story, and good luck in the last few weeks of the semester and finals!
Hi Julia! I enjoyed the name of your stories! They were really creative and catchy! I think all the images you chose for your site were great. They were great quality and they really helped me visualize the story better. I remember reading most of the original stories that you used throughout the year so it was cool to see what twist you decided to put on them. I think you did a great job of turning the stories into your own and making them exciting for the readers to read. Your overall site looks great! The formatting of your stories makes it easier for a reader to follow along and not get lost in the story. So good job on that! I enjoyed the ending of your Moon Man story better than the original ending. Yours was much happier. Good luck on the rest of the semester and finishing up your project!
Hey Julia! I love your portfolio. The images are all so clear and work great on every page! I would however, add links from your home page to your other stories to make navigating a little easier. I like how your first story was told by the wolf. It made it fun and interesting to read. The way you worded everything was very simple. It made it much more enjoyable to read than trying to decipher what everything meant. Overall I really enjoyed your website and think you did a great job! Congrats on being done for the semester!
Hey Julia. I just read your story Good Wolf and really enjoyed it. I like how made the story in first perspective of the wolf because I haven't seen that done many times. I think you did a fantastic job of telling the story from the eyes of the wolf. It makes me wonder on if the wolf is actually a wolf or a dog because the wolf is very obedient and usually wolves are not like that. But also you did add in the part that all the wolves that looked like him were also called wolves so he must be one. It was nice to see that the wolf respected the human enough to give back the pig to the woman. I think the wolf just wanted the love that the pig received from the woman and was very happy to receive it from the man instead. He even received milk and maybe becomes his pet full time.
Hey Julia! I just got done reading your good wolf story. You did an excellent job on that story! I like the way you let the reader really understand how the wolf was feeling during the things that happen in the story. I think that it gives the reader a different perspective on the story than if you would have written it in third person. I also loved your portfolio in general. It had a really easy to use, aesthetically pleasing layout.
Hi! I just finished reading your version of the Moon Man story. I remember reading the original version a little, but reading your authors note definitely helped refresh my memory. I really loved how you chose to change up this story! It still had the same morals tied to the original it felt like, but it was also a completely new story. I especially liked how you were able to change the ending. I like that the rich man was content at the end and was able to feel loved and like he belonged in the world. Great job!
ReplyDeleteHello, Julia! First off, I have to say that your dog is absolutely adorable and I appreciate the picture of him you posted! I have just finished reading your take on the classic story "The Moon Man", and I was really impressed! I had not read the original version of this story, so I did read the authors note before I read your version to kind of help me make comparisons between the two. I do like how you changed the story to make it your own, but it was still similar enough to the original so that the readers can see where your ideas came from. I also really liked how you changed the ending to make it your own, and I can honestly say that I preferred your ending to the story better than the original ending! I love the title of the story, and I do think that will make the readers interested in reading it. Your story definitely made me feel happy for the rich man that he was finally able to find happiness and fulfillment in being turned into the moon. I am glad that he was not regretful of his decision to take the risk of being turned into something he did not know what would be. I would say, for your future stories, to definitely continue this same writing style you have started with! It will be nice to see some stories with more details, but I did really enjoy this first story! I hope you have fun with this project and I look forward to reading more from you! Have a great semester!
ReplyDeleteHi Julia! I loved your retelling of the Moon Man story. I remember reading the original story I few weeks back, and I always felt a little unsatisfied with the ending. However, I loved the twist you added, because it made a lot more sense than the original ending. I love how you brought in humans interaction with the moon on a regular basis, and allowed the man to find satisfaction in that. I love how you kept the style more consistent with the original, as well. You had a refreshing take on the story without harming the integrity of the original. I am definitely excited to read more from you!
ReplyDeleteHi Julia! i just finished reading your story about the moon, i loved it! the story was the perfect combination of a good short story but also something that kept you intrigued the whole time. your imagery and details within the story kept me visualizing the entire time. Also your use of dialogue was great! I love how you made the ending and it made me happy to know that the man who was so unsatisfied was finally able to be happy. It was great how you related the moon to so many things that people use it for. In the future maybe a little more expansion on your story would help. Although it is a great short story, this story would also be great with some more details and length to it.
ReplyDeleteHey Julia,
ReplyDeleteI just finished reading about the moon man story. It was excellent! The story was short and sweet and you managed to keep me interested in what was going to happen next the entire time. I realized when reading it that I had a picture of what was happening in my head the whole time. I think this is cool because you obviously are talented at writing sensory and visual language.
Great job on your story!
Hi Julia! I read your Moon Man, Shine Bright story. I had not read that story so your Author’s Notes were really well written. I enjoyed the point you were trying to make with your overall story—be happy with who you are because there is no one else like you in this world and you are who you are for a reason. I thought you put an interesting twist on it. Although the rich man did not feel fulfilled, he felt fulfilled as the moon and filled was happy to know that he was helping others, which is also a big life lesson. We can always benefit from helping others. My favorite quote is “a candle loses nothing by lighting another candle” so this story made me happy to read. Thanks so much for your story and I look forward to reading more from you! You did a great job!
ReplyDeleteHi Julia! I remember reading your Moon Man story at the beginning of the semester, and I just read your Wolf story that you've added to your portfolio. Now I have an easier way to find all your stories, hahaha! I liked that you made a writing style in your wolf story similar to the mindset of a personified animal. You don't expect an animal to have perfect English or complete understanding of the consequences of a situation. Your adaptation to look through the perspective of the animal made for a cute, feel good story. That seems to be an overarching theme you have going for your stories in this course whenever I come across them! I like your visual style as well with your website. It's clean and easy to look at, while also still being cute as well! I can't wait to come back and read more from you!
ReplyDeleteHi Julia! I loved the Moon Man story. I could see where you had based it on the Laotian story, but you did a great job of making it your own. Your character was incredibly relatable, even though I'm not rich or a man--everyone can relate to his situation. Can money buy happiness, fulfillment, or love? I really liked that he was more introspective than the man in the original myth, and he was a lot more sympathetic. In the original, I remember feeling a vindictive satisfaction that that ungrateful man had been turned into the moon and couldn't turn back. In your story, I was happy for him because he got everything he wanted and he seemed more...worthy?...of being the moon...? I don't know if that's the right word. Anyway, you did a great job of inspiring sympathy for you new character in a short span and keeping with your inspiration. Great work!
ReplyDeleteHey Julia! I just finished reading your story "Moon Man, Shine Bright," and loved it! I appreciated that it was short and easy to read. I thought the dialogue between the two characters was nicely written and it was easy for the reader to understand what was going on between them. This was such a creative version of the original story "The Man in the Moon." As I was reading your story, I was beginning to feel a little sorry for the man, all he wanted was to feel like he was wanted and had a purpose. I think this story had a valuable life lesson as well, being that even though you may have all the wealth and jewels in the world, you still may not be fulfilled. On a side note, I think the overall layout and theme of your Portfolio is nice! I like how it's simple to navigate and organized.
ReplyDeleteHello Julia, I really enjoyed reading your version of the original story called “Man on the Moon.” I thought your explanations for each change of the blacksmith was excellent! In my opinion I thought your story was better than the original due to all the detail that you added within your version of the story. Having all the detail really allowed me to connect to the story better because I could envision what was happening even better and relate to the character. Also I liked how you turned the story into a happy ending with the blacksmith finally being happy! I wonder what happened to the shaman, maybe in the future a story could be made about the shaman’s life and how he ended up becoming a shaman. I think you portfolio is also looking great! You have great pictures and an easy to navigate loadout. Overall the story was great, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteI really like your idea of retelling stories from myth and folklore. It is always interesting to see the way that people interpret stories differently and how it might change the story once it is retold. The words you chose to include in the story really add a lot of detail and emphasis on certain parts. It is nice to read stories like this because it is easier to visualize exactly what the writer intends. Towards the end, I really like how you choose to have a paragraph where every sentence starts with the same phrase. When stories have paragraphs like this, it emphasizes what is being said. Was there any reason in particular why you chose to retell this story? Was it your favorite? Or did you feel that you could write the best story from it? Answering these kind of questions would be nice for the reader to know in the author’s notes! I really enjoyed reading your stories. I look forward to coming back and reading some more!
ReplyDeleteHey Julia! I remember reading and enjoying your Moon Man story earlier in the semester, I love that you included it in your project as well! I also enjoyed your story of the wolf, I felt like I could feel the wolf's sadness when he realized he had upset the human. How would the story have changed if the wolf had already eaten the pig when the human had arrived? I'd be curious to see how the human would have responded and how sad the wolf would have been. I can only imagine how distraught the woman would have been. With the moon man, why did the man desire to be these many things? Should the shaman have shown a degree of compassion and restraint when it became obvious that this man was intoxicated? It would have been an even more entertaining story if the man had returned the next day, still determined to be transformed instead of in his present state. I can't wait to see what stories you choose next!
ReplyDeleteHey Julia, Great portfolio so far! I like how you have your webpage set up. The moon picture on the first story is particularly powerful as it takes up the entire page, really setting the mood for that story. I really like the “Moon Man” story itself as well. Your descriptive imagery is fantastic. It seems like you have kept the description down to keep the story lean, but I would love to see a fully embellished story. I actually laughed out loud at the idea of a chalice afraid of germs. I really like that this story ultimately had a happy ending and I think that makes a difference in the way this retelling will be perceived. Typically stories like this only return their protagonist back to start or leave them stranded but having learned a lesson. I like the idea that the moon was once a man but is now far happier being the moon. Overall excellent portfolio, keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteHello Julia,
ReplyDeleteYour portfolio is setup nicely! It is also easy navigate and to get to your comment wall. I like your idea of re-telling the mythological stories. These stories have great moral values. I want to applaud you on making the description in the Man in the Moon as vivid as you did. When authors go into detail when describing the story it helps visualize the story. The Bad Wolf, Good Wolf story was even better than the first story that you wrote. I really like the picture of the wolf that you used too. I could really feel the emotions of the wolf and the human in this story. The fact that you changed the perspective of the story being told from the wolf gives the story a different meaning. Why did you want to do that? I enjoyed reading both versions. Your authors note is well written as well! Keep up the good work. I am looking forward to reading more stories.
Julia! I have returned to your comment board! I wanted to see your progress so far on your story posts or see how the revisions have gone for you c: Though I cry not seeing extra stories to read, I had a good time going back and reading the others again! I feel as though your Wolf story has a better flow this time around! You also seemed to add a bit more elements I didn't notice before with commas, bold, and easier to grasp dialogue. It still warms my heart to read and I really appreciate that! Do you think that your future stories will also have the same plot of teaching a moral lesson or doing right to a wrong you've committed? Your stories have deeper meaning than just what's on the surface which I love. I can't wait to come back and see other additions! Bye bye for now~
ReplyDeleteHey Julia! I just read your "Man in the Moon" story and I absolutely love how you included what role that the moon plays in the world! This is just a suggestion, but I think it would be beneficial to your readers if maybe you included how the moon also plays a role creating the tides in the ocean. I also think it would be interesting to see the man/goblet's reaction to being turned into the moon! As even I did not know how farmers and fishermen depended on the moon for their livelihoods, maybe you could depict the man as throwing a tantrum because he was turned into a moon. Maybe he could ask, "The moon? I wanted to have a purpose and you turned me into the moon? Why couldn't you have turned me into the sun at least?", and then there could be someone or something that educates him on the importance of the moon!
ReplyDeleteHey Julia" I just read "the Moon Man" and i really love how you changed from the original version. In the Man in the Moon, the ending was a miserable for the blacksmith, to become the moon forever. Your new version turned out that the Moon was actually a reward for the wealthy man. The richest image of the man reminded me about the life many people i know. They were rich but they doesn't have much friend, i mean truly friend, not just a relationship. As you pointed out in your notes, it was very hard to grasp the happiness and money was not alway a factor to achieve happiness. Be grateful for what you already have was always a great lesson. I just had one little thing to curious, that was why the shaman risked his power to fulfill that rich people? Was a shaman receive something as a reward to doing this?
ReplyDeleteHey Julia!
ReplyDeleteYour way of telling stories is such a refreshing take on the subject matter of the class. I especially love the way you choose the images for your stories. The main image on your site is a drawing, a take on the world from someone else's view or background, but the individual story pictures are presented with some sort of crisp feel to them. They are high resolution pictures of the natural world and then your stories follow them with both grace and patience in presentation. I thoroughly enjoy this style of blogging and presenting information. The stories were also quite unique to the original interpretations and the spacing in the presentation helped me follow the narrative better and your decision to italicize and bold certain words was also very helpful to me as a reader. Thank you for sharing your great work, Julia! I look forward to reading more of your portfolio as the year continues.
Hi Julia!
ReplyDeleteI just got finished reading your story Good Wolf. I loved the picture you chose for your cover picture. That allowed us to get a clear picture in our heads of what the wolf in the story looked like. I thought how you worded and went about telling this story was really different and interesting. Since it was being told from an animals perspective, I like how you made the wolf's thoughts much simpler. In the story, it made me wonder why the human was so surprised that the wolf took the pig and was so upset at him. He should realize that it is the wolf's nature to hunt and get smaller animals for their food, so that part was confusing to me. I did like how it ended and how grateful the woman was to have her pig back!
I really enjoyed your first story! Usually, when there's a story about someone wanting a grandiose life for themselves, they get horridly turned away after learning a terrible lesson and eventually learn to settle for their average life. So it was very satisfying to have a story like yours where the man gets exactly what he wants and is perfectly satisfied. After all, why do we seem to shun our desires and the want for a better life? I think there's nothing wrong with that and stories that make us feel guilty or confused for wanting something more have left a plain taste in my mouth. So thank you so much for that first story! I also really enjoyed your other two stories. It was very heart-warming to explore the bond between a domesticated wolf and his owner. You did a great job with your use of pictures in "The Foolish Feline." The one at the end was kind of funny with the tiger sitting there in defeat. Awesome job overall!
ReplyDeleteHey there Julia!
ReplyDeleteI was reading the titles of your different stories and saw that most of them were alliterated (Moon Man and Foolish Feline) or at least softly alliterated (Cocky King) and love the theme. Then I saw the Good Wolf story title and thought "Nooooooo!" haha! So of course I chose the Good Wolf story to make sure the story made up for the break of the chain! I actually enjoyed it a lot! I think the way that you rewrote the story was very unique, but also portrayed your own style very well! I honest to goodness tried really hard to find something that I would change in order to provide some constructive criticism for you on the story, but I just couldn't think of anything! I think Abbie Farwell would approve! Anyway, great story, and good luck in the last few weeks of the semester and finals!
Hi Julia!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed the name of your stories! They were really creative and catchy! I think all the images you chose for your site were great. They were great quality and they really helped me visualize the story better. I remember reading most of the original stories that you used throughout the year so it was cool to see what twist you decided to put on them. I think you did a great job of turning the stories into your own and making them exciting for the readers to read. Your overall site looks great! The formatting of your stories makes it easier for a reader to follow along and not get lost in the story. So good job on that! I enjoyed the ending of your Moon Man story better than the original ending. Yours was much happier. Good luck on the rest of the semester and finishing up your project!
Hey Julia! I love your portfolio. The images are all so clear and work great on every page! I would however, add links from your home page to your other stories to make navigating a little easier. I like how your first story was told by the wolf. It made it fun and interesting to read. The way you worded everything was very simple. It made it much more enjoyable to read than trying to decipher what everything meant. Overall I really enjoyed your website and think you did a great job! Congrats on being done for the semester!
ReplyDeleteHey Julia. I just read your story Good Wolf and really enjoyed it. I like how made the story in first perspective of the wolf because I haven't seen that done many times. I think you did a fantastic job of telling the story from the eyes of the wolf. It makes me wonder on if the wolf is actually a wolf or a dog because the wolf is very obedient and usually wolves are not like that. But also you did add in the part that all the wolves that looked like him were also called wolves so he must be one. It was nice to see that the wolf respected the human enough to give back the pig to the woman. I think the wolf just wanted the love that the pig received from the woman and was very happy to receive it from the man instead. He even received milk and maybe becomes his pet full time.
ReplyDeleteHey Julia! I just got done reading your good wolf story. You did an excellent job on that story! I like the way you let the reader really understand how the wolf was feeling during the things that happen in the story. I think that it gives the reader a different perspective on the story than if you would have written it in third person. I also loved your portfolio in general. It had a really easy to use, aesthetically pleasing layout.
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